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Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
Total Views: 900
Average Vote:    3.0000
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Description:


I wrote this while I was still waiting for an answer from my boyfriend


Waiting



Why are you so shy
When we are all alone?
And you bearly say a word
Anytime we're on the phone?

But add another person
And everything will change
The awkwardness turns comic
And then you are out of range

Is it because you like me?
Or we just can't have fun?
I really would just like to know
Before I have to up and run

I put myself out on a limb
Much farther than intended
But is wanting love such a sin?
For my poor heart's just mended




Submitted on 2006-12-19 20:59:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i think you can tell a guy really cares for a girl when he looses himself in a one on one situation,
what i believe it is, hes trying to love with a part of him he has no control over, and this part speaks know words, this part is his spirit,
just whisper one word in his ear "relax" he will love you for it,
the more familiar he becomes with himself loving you, the more fun you have as you grow together, and you will know its unquestionably true.
| Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
  you need to fix your wording alittle
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it. Sweet and still slightly different from others I have seen. Nice wording and things dont seem to forced. It also feels extremely real, which is a good thing. Great write, keep it up.

-Randee
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]


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