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Wedding Vows

Author: sravenlyn
ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67
Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Wedding Vows

I now ask you for one thing
May I own your heart
To allow our hearts to sing
To allow our souls to make beautiful art

Now I ask for you to care
To love me no matter what they say
Now all I need to know is if you'd dare
To love me in every litte way

I'm inlove with who you are
I simle every time I hear your voice
You are my one and only shining star
You are my only love choice

Submitted on 2006-12-20 16:13:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is beautiful :)
keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by mute eternal | [ Reply to This ]
  I love how much emotion is put into this short sweet poem. It is weel writen and very memerable. I hope that who ever this is writen for loves you as much as you obviously love them. You are a talented writer...Keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]

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