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    dots Submission Name: Fuck Christmasdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsFuck Christmasdots
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    Christmas
    God's gift to Earth
    The day of
    Precious Jesus' birth
    Well fuck christmas
    With it's presents and tree
    Everyone running around
    With their pathetic glee
    Fuck their wreaths and holly
    Fuck Santa
    For be so fucking Jolly
    And fucking fat as hell
    I hate christmas
    Can't you tell?
    Fuck the lights
    The way the shine
    Building up
    A fucking christmas shrine
    Only at Christmas do we try to care
    Any other time of year
    We don't dare
    Fuck christmas
    Always leaving me alone
    Stuck and hollow
    All on my own
    So fuck christmas
    It comes and goes so fast
    But I can promise you
    This christmas is my last....





    Submitted on 2006-12-20 21:00:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't get why you would hate Christmas,even if the whole year sucks its at least good to have one day(just my opinion) This is extremely depressing and sounds like a rant but I guess you meant that right?
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      well said on that... I really hate Christmas myself. but I really don't have to worry about my family comin around since we all hate eachother... So that all kinda works out for me...
    Great and very funny write....
    Lizzie
    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by babygirl09 | [ Reply to This ]
      alas, i no longer feel so alone in my cynicism about christmas. your most intriguing lines, to me, were

    "Only at Christmas do we try to care
    Any other time of year
    We don't dare"

    its a sad truth that we take a day out of the year to decide we'll be nice and expect it from others when in a matter of hours and a fit of wrapping paper, everything will go back to the normal. christmas is a time for either true generosity or when we realize how fake eachother can be.

    your lines are very strong, but i would suggest some in-line punctuation.

    good write, i can honestly say its how i felt.
    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by Nero_s Decay | [ Reply to This ]
      It is good but sad. It says " It comes and goes so fast
    But I can promise you
    This christmas is my last...." Does that mean you are going to try and commet suicide uase it sounds like it. That's what the poems saying at least. So don't try it cause you told me I wouldn't lose my bf. I know I shouldn't worry and that I am over reacting I am just worryed ok. I sent the movie list to you. SO pick one. And againa good write.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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