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    dots Submission Name: MidNight Dovedots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMidNight Dovedots
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    Holding you within my arms,
    The street light falls upon your face.
    Casting passion; lovers charm.
    With you i gan' my hearts replace.
    Molding you into my soul,
    I pull us deep and dust to dawn.
    Blacks pools we dance and lust our toll.
    Blink out your eyes, and then it's gone.
    Tighter comes our hands embrace.
    Bringing me to edge of tears.
    Silence as the dark replaced.
    Short turnings of my mental gears.
    Losing out and breath i lack.
    Sinking fast in quicksand love.
    Made up my mind, i shan't go back.
    I touch her face, my MidNight Dove.
    Bringing back the long missed feelings.
    Shouting out with love amore.
    Singing Jack and Sally; Killing.
    Now i lie upon the floor.
    Damned the silence; how it choked me.
    Then it told me what to do.....
    Staring softly......Shining city lights......
    "Let me show you how much i love you."




    Submitted on 2006-12-20 21:13:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Of course you know I love this one! lol
    Thank you so much for writing it. Even though that memory will never fade from my mind. I'll always have this poem to look back on and remember it again. I love you so so much!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good poem and i can really relate to it. keep up the good work :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]


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