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    dots Submission Name: Life's Hamburgerdots

    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 935
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 538

       NEW poem.
    I felt kind of funny.....

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    dotsLife's Hamburgerdots

    Feasting slow on lifes hamburger,
    hold the pickles and tomatoes.
    Cries and fries,
    Go dry your eyes.
    "Sir, there's napkins on the tables."
    Onion rings and heartless screams;
    Burger Kings and greasy dreams.
    Taco johns, your pain long gone.
    Push down your coke, the race is on.
    Pizza's stacked up five feet tall.
    The voices speak, their lipid call.
    Choke down your guilt, this lifes a
    You'll get a toy in every bag.

    Submitted on 2006-12-20 21:19:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a poem i would like to order to go please!

    extra napkins.

    | Posted on 2011-04-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you took foods and put it down exclusive.
    It kind of made me hungry for Rally's and what not lol.

    Steak&Shake this is humorous.Bite and taste.

    I'd think you thought of this while eating in a diner somewhere.

    Coolly laced
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      lol this is funny I like it. Using fast food as your subject but also throwing in a little bit of life that all of us can relate to. Very nice

    | Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      lol! I don't think I'd read this one yet, but I love it! I think you said something about writing something that compared life to fast food, but I didn't think you were serious! I love it! I would've never thought of comparing such unlikely things to each other! Love you so much!

    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a neat quirky poem.
    i haven't seen many like it!
    keep up the good work :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]

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