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    dots Submission Name: What You Aredots
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    Author: social circus
    ASL Info:    16/M/LA
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 17/57/36
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 537



    Description:
       THIS WAS THE CHORUS TO A SONG I WROTE ABOUT MY GIRLFRIEND SO I TURNED IT INTO A POEM. I HOPE YOU LIKE IT


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    dotsWhat You Aredots
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    your the hope that keeps me alive
    your the strength that lets me strive

    your the circus in my head
    your the happiness thats not yet dead

    your the warmth thats in my cold
    your the young that cant get old

    your the top of my list
    your the kiss that cant be missed

    your the thought when im alone
    your more precious than home

    your the love that will never seize
    your the love that never leaves

    YOU ARE PERFECT.




    Submitted on 2006-12-20 21:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel speical reading this. Makes me feel all tingley inside. Very good you should sing it to someone.
    Keep it up hun,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work Ian, i agree with kayaverina - this piece does make you feel good just reading it. I think its just knowing that this kind of love still exists in the world. You have a great style of writing. I can't wait to read more of your work. xx

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful poem. I really like it. It is beautiful.

    It made me feel really good reading it. I don't really know why though.

    It feels very much orignal.
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Kayaverina | [ Reply to This ]


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