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    dots Submission Name: foreverdots
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    Author: social circus
    ASL Info:    16/M/LA
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 17/57/36
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       falling in love is not just finding someone you care about its about living forever with that person and never letting go.


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    something just crossed my mind
    lying here in the still darkness of a love song
    as i kiss the clouds i see your face
    and you look wonderful i feel wonderful
    and is this what it feels like to be in love
    and is this what it feels like to be insane
    tell me this is what it feels like to live forever
    something just crossed my mind
    sitting hear lost in a dream world
    as i reach for the stars i kiss your lips
    its better than roses and sweeter than candy
    you feel wonderful you taste wonderful
    this is what it feels like to live forever




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      Touching and tender love poem. Good work, Ian!
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful poem. It touches me. I really like" I reach for the stars I kiss your lips" Very nice.
    Keep it up hun,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      "and is this what it feels like to be in love
    and is this what it feels like to be insane"

    I have to say, I'm impressed. This is simple, and the point is easy to catch. Short and sweet if I may use the cliché.
    Keep writing!
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      "and is this what it feels like to be in love
    and is this what it feels like to be insane"

    I have to say, I'm impressed. This is simple, and the point is easy to catch. Short and sweet if I may use the cliché.
    Keep writing!
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      this is what it feels like to live forever

    That was my absolute fav. line in this wonderful piece. Actually, I was having a freakin' horrible day, but I said, you know what, let's spread joy, it's almost Christmas, what the hell right?

    And then you come out with the first line : something just crossed my mind, and I'm thinking, this is the first writer whose work I've never seen admits, that he was thinking. So...I read on.

    and is this what it feels like to be in love
    and is this what it feels like to be insane

    I felt like I was gonna melt, it felt like you were actually talking to the reader--actually talking to me. I felt like crying, and cry I did. I've never cried over any thing like this in my life, so be happy to know that you have been the first to ever make me cry.

    Inspirational and wonderful write.
    Kudos!
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you really are amazing with words. I especially love the lines:

    "and is this what it feels like to be in love
    and is this what it feels like to be insane"

    It really does sum up love for me, the closest thing to being crazy, its great ! I wish you all the best - and i really think your description of this piece is poetry in itself. Well done. xx

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very elegently written. it is powerfull in such a short ammount of writing. It has alot of feeling and power behind it. Also it gives a sense of hope to me, although i am not sure that was your intent. great work keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]


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