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    dots Submission Name: Sunsetdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I like the weary colors of sunset
    when the sky is tired
    from a long day of work
    and is almost ready
    to turn off the light
    and settle down to rest.

    Submitted on 2004-01-29 23:31:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm, this is very eloquent and minimal yet it says a lot. I've read a few of your pieces now and I've noticed you like to keep things short and simple. As much as I like it, it makes it very hard to critique goddamit hahahah!

    Weary, tired, long day, turn off, settle down - these are all words and phrases that fit excellently with your theme of a sunset... with a human element thrown in so I can almost imagine the sun to be a nine-to-fiver coming back from a hard day at the office.

    I dunno what else to say... it's written with brevity and with a sparse usage of words that conveys a ton of imagery to my mind.

    Yea. Nice piece.

    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece held a fragrance of my poem, "Bedtime"... the imagery of the sun being tired at the end of the day, and sinking into sleep. Very peaceful and serene...

    And, yes, I'm going on a reading rampage, trying to catch up...you don't have to comment upon my comments or anything, I'm just trying to read read read...
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, that's nice. In a way, I agree w/ silver... Many sunsets seem to me to be the prima donna's final encore.... but this piece reminds me that the prima donna has most likely been up all day, and has gotten very little sleep the night before... this is a lovely piece, cuddle. makes me want to curl up and be catlike. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your short poems, they are always such little treasures. This one however doesn't sit right , largely because I have always found sunsets dramatic, flamboyant almost...on the other hand the pale wash of Dawn always gives me the impression that she really wasn't ready to rise that early. LOL Just a different perspective. Thanks, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      short and sweet sort of like a Dickinson respectable m'lady
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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