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    dots Submission Name: Shadow Mandots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1022
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 322



    Description:
       This is about my real-life stalker. not the german teacher, my lover. lol. this guy is like madly in love w/ me and he doesn't even know im 2 years younger then him. we've never spoken before. i think its cute though. (he thinks im beautiful. lol)

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    dotsShadow Mandots
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    Shadow in the dark
    Lurking thoughts around you
    All alone…

    Open arms in despair
    My presence
    Shrinking
    Shriveling away
    Like the rose
    You never gave me

    Times passes
    We laugh
    We cry
    I still don’t know
    Your name




    Submitted on 2004-06-01 21:16:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      all in all this is a good write...its got a good format, a great idea behind it, a mysterious quality to it...i don't think it flows as well as it could, but then again i can't really come up with any ideas on how to make it better so i guess i shouldn't say anything...good work!
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
      very beautifully written.it could be a stalker or just the mind is playing tricks .
    a good poem leaves the reader wondering.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by bilal anaim | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, the whole stalking thing is a tad bit creepy,
    be cautious. But the poem is very well done, you did a good job of chooisng the words.Good luck with your stalker.....
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]
      actually i can be a scary situation rising...he's either very shy or very disturbed...i would take precautions my dear...
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is very well put. i enjoyed it a lot my favorite part would have to be the very beginning. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]


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