life is a rollercoaster -------------------------------------------
life its like a rollercoaster. its got twist and turns
bumps and bends.inclins and falls.
life is fast and rapid its like the spped
of a rollercoaster
it rides the track of life
it fallows the chains of destainy
it flows with fate and it all ends with death
the best thing I like about you is that you write from the heart.
you wrote about the bumps, falls and great speed of the coaster but you didn't write about the rise,the ascent, the thrill and enjoyment you get while riding the coaster...
keep writing...it will serve as an outlet for your obviously troubled emotions.
interesting. i think that your really scratching the surface there. and that this piece has a lot of potential. i'd deffinatly work with that metaphore i bit more.
Submission Name: life is a rollercoaster
