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    dots Submission Name: To Live a Liedots
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    Author: Nynaeve
    ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43/67/28
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Just my general feeling ever since I started the university. No time.


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    dotsTo Live a Liedots
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    All I want is a fraction of my life,
    Just one moment of peace.
    Leaving all my worries behind,
    Drowning in my thirst to breath.

    All I've asked for is one moment alone,
    Facing only myself.
    Avoiding any problems I've had in the past,
    Drowning my sorrow in vain.

    Everything changes,
    Everything shifts,
    I can't keep up,
    I'm in a swirl of disbelief.

    The clock is broken,
    The numbers have vanished,
    Time stands still,
    The illusion has perished.




    Submitted on 2006-12-21 16:21:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well, I liked it alot. I have alot of time poems myself, but most of them are how time passes by waaaay too fast. In reading this, I couldn't find anything wring with it. It flowed well and the wording was nicely done. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the last stanza. It's one of those things that hits you in the face like... a brick, if you will. this entire piece is very forceful and full of emotion. Your choice of words is excellent and i commend you on this work of art.
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by lebeauvide | [ Reply to This ]


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