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Get Out

Author: sravenlyn
ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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sounds the opposite of what it is. So ill tell you this... its a happy/emotional/semi-sexual poem

Get Out

Get out of my head
So that I can focus
I want you in my bed
And you know this
Get out of my blood stream
So my heart can beat right
You made me and my body scream
While you held us tight
Get out of my eyes
So that I can see what I'm doing
There are no more cries
Since your love has been brewing

Submitted on 2006-12-21 17:23:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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