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    dots Submission Name: double rhymedots
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    Author: DrewDilla
    ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131/196/51
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 938
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 532



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       This was just an Idea to try n see what I come up with. Now picture a guy saying this 2 a friend.


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    dotsdouble rhymedots
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    I got a beer here
    gotta steer clear
    before the deer is near
    4rd gear brings fear

    Ready for a big Mac attack
    It’s a double stack that’s back
    This nick knack gonna crack
    So take it back jack

    Or I’ll hit you with a flat bat
    So you’ll need a fat hat
    Where you at Mat
    Your fixing that flat

    That’s hunting n working
    That's stating to be boring
    So start poking n jerking
    No bitching cause I'm fisting




    Submitted on 2006-12-21 18:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice little beat ya created here. made me laugh tho'...

    'Ready for a big Mac attack
    It’s a double stack that’s back' lol
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, i like it b/c it seams alittle psychotic.
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Lil_ Buddy | [ Reply to This ]
      These are really cool
    I thought of the old Jim Croce song
    Hop on the bus Gus
    Give me the key Lee
    I cant remember the name of the song though
    I like your skills with rhyming
    Thats a pretty hard craft to master
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you gert a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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