double rhyme

Author: DrewDilla ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131 /196 /51 Words: 83

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double rhyme

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I got a beer here gotta steer clear before the deer is near 4rd gear brings fear Ready for a big Mac attack It’s a double stack that’s back This nick knack gonna crack So take it back jack Or I’ll hit you with a flat bat So you’ll need a fat hat Where you at Mat Your fixing that flat That’s hunting n working That's stating to be boring So start poking n jerking No bitching cause I'm fisting

Submitted on 2006-12-21 18:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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nice little beat ya created here. made me laugh tho'... 'Ready for a big Mac attack It’s a double stack that’s back' lol

| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

lol, i like it b/c it seams alittle psychotic.

| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Lil_ Buddy | [ Reply to This ]

These are really cool I thought of the old Jim Croce song Hop on the bus Gus Give me the key Lee I cant remember the name of the song though I like your skills with rhyming Thats a pretty hard craft to master Great Job God Bless Ron Please if you gert a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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