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double rhyme


Author: DrewDilla
ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131 /196 /51
Words: 83
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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This was just an Idea to try n see what I come up with. Now picture a guy saying this 2 a friend.


double rhyme



I got a beer here
gotta steer clear
before the deer is near
4rd gear brings fear

Ready for a big Mac attack
It’s a double stack that’s back
This nick knack gonna crack
So take it back jack

Or I’ll hit you with a flat bat
So you’ll need a fat hat
Where you at Mat
Your fixing that flat

That’s hunting n working
That's stating to be boring
So start poking n jerking
No bitching cause I'm fisting




Submitted on 2006-12-21 18:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice little beat ya created here. made me laugh tho'...

'Ready for a big Mac attack
It’s a double stack that’s back' lol
| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  lol, i like it b/c it seams alittle psychotic.
| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Lil_ Buddy | [ Reply to This ]
  These are really cool
I thought of the old Jim Croce song
Hop on the bus Gus
Give me the key Lee
I cant remember the name of the song though
I like your skills with rhyming
Thats a pretty hard craft to master
Great Job
God Bless
Ron

Please if you gert a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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