Your My World

Author: sravenlyn ASL Info:    17/f/NJ Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67 Words: 79

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Your My World

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Your the center of my world My one and only guy I am forever your girl Because I'm your and your mine We belong with eachother We deserve to be happy together Our love isnt in black and white but in color Even though we might not be forever No matter what happens I love you and I'm always here for I have no fears unless I lose you then... I guess losing you is my only fear

Submitted on 2006-12-21 19:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It was a nice poem. But, I noticed alot of spelling mistakes. Though that doesn't really matter once you get into the poem. I think maybe, that the peom coud have been longer. I think you can write, and You have to use what you can. <3 I also like that the fact you mention your only fear is losing the one you love, Believe me that is a HUGE fear of mine. Even if it's not a boyfriend <3 I liked it anyway. It shows your love.

| Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by EbonyBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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