Fear of unforgiving loss... -------------------------------------------
You ask me why I am so afriad
I just look at you and shake my head
If you could only see what I see
See all the fear I face everyday
Fear of you, of me, of what we could mean
If you could only walk one moment in my shoes
You would know the weight on my shoulders
See the lies I've told
See people I've hurt
See the pain in the eyes of the people I've abandoned
Can you see the fear???
Look deep inside of me
Understand that if I lost you
All of the hurt and pain I've caused the people I love
Would have been for nothing
And I think that it would hurt me more
Than it could ever possibly hurt them
I fear that God may never forgive me
I've told to many lies
Made too many people I love cry
But maybe this love is worth it???
Can you tell me
Tell me that this is right
Tell me everything will be alright
Please I need to hear it
Just say that this is not what condemns my soul
This is not what I will burn forever in hell for
You will save me
God will forgive me
My family and friends will still love me
And I will have everything and everyone with me
I have to start off by saying when I first saw the title I was a bit confused but after I read I got it. Anywho you seem to do anything now and days to be with Bradley. Whether thats good or not is beyond me but right now it ain't sounding great.
You seem to do a good job of letting out emotion in detail. (have I mentioned that before? If I have sorry). You give others who don't know who you are a good idea of who you are. . Well I better be off cause I'm too tired for commenting now.
i think your fears you express here are very real however i think they could be expressed in a sharper manner so that the fear is nailed into the reader... so that the reader feels the fear with you.
i think as you keep writing and reading other peoples stuff your style will become more your own and less angst like so dont stop writing... its a good release.
im sitting here trying to think of something to say that will help you in your writing... trying to remember what people told me when i first started the whole writing buzz but it seems forever ago now... i think the most important thing is to own your words... make them your slaves. stay away from cliché ideas or ideas that everyone else has written about in words that everyone else has used... strive to be unique and orriginal and find your own voice.
above all dont give up.
as for the content. its hard to balance potential loves and the rest of your world... you know when one of your friends gets a boy or girlfriend and forget you exist... thats so hard not to do really but i think that if this person makes the rest of your world hate you you gotta work out if its worth it... but thats somethng only you can decide...