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    dots Submission Name: Smolderdots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 297



    Description:
       I'm not sure about the line breaks, though I think I'm improving. Guesses as to subject are, again, welcome.


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    dotsSmolderdots
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    I smoke under your touch
    I smolder and simmer,
    darling,
    yet my skin does not scorch
    Embers gleam,
    orange against my white,
    your bright lust colors the skin
    I am Moses’ burning bush
    flickering with flames;
    I do not burn for you




    Submitted on 2006-12-21 23:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      there is a cast of smoke and shadows not spoken of, seen
    but not remarked on as flames dance
    this licked closely up to sexuality..as fire brushes up the sides of a log, and subside, apparently no burn ensued..then subsided...i felt a kindred pulse of the sea or breathing's calm rythm, uplifting this...
    I liked it alot

    my suggested line breaks..tho' fine as is.

    I smoke under
    your touch
    I smolder and simmer,
    darling,
    yet my skin
    does not scorch
    Embers gleam, orange
    against my white,
    your bright lust
    colors the skin. I
    am Moses’ burning bush
    flickering with flames;
    I do not
    burn for you
    I do not burn
    for you

    regards,
    koster
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by koster | [ Reply to This ]


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