Description: Is it normal to write poetry in the space of five minutes? Because I can think of maybe two or three poems in my entire collection that took more time than that. Meh. Anyway, again, line break suggestions.
Lightly comes the muse -------------------------------------------
Lightly comes the muse
With steps soft as feathers
Curling and gyrating against air
Illusive on my mindís horizons
A mirage of smoke and mirrors
She is no substance; no person
The stuff of legends and cigarettes
Fabled, transient, and dangerous
I agree with Dale. I suspect that this was maturing in the back of your mind for more than the five minutes that it took you to pen it. Its quite nicely said in fact.
I personally disagree with him about the usefulness of typographical cuteness, at least in this case. I think your lines stand just fine as they are, and that work on linebreaks will not bring much.
Will try to read more of your stuff when time permits,
Did it take five minutes? How long were you thinking before you started writing? I have days where the muse as it were has me pounding keys, and I have weeks I sit and stare into space. Anyway this poem works for me, it does beg for a more inspired form. Something that fits its airs and hints of smoky lairs where artists imbibe that which is not necessarily good for them (striving to create) so how about?
Lightly comes the muse With steps soft as feathers
Curling and gyrating against ( air )
Illusive on my mindís horizons A mirage smoke and mirrors
She is no substance; no person The stuff of cigarettes legends Fabled, transient and dangerous