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    dots Submission Name: Hero’s Holidaydots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1309
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       This was written to be read aloud. The emphasis should be on the first word and second from the last full word (of, the and, etc. don't count) of each line.


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    dotsHero’s Holidaydots
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    Gather and allow songs to levitate across empty spaces
    Stretch up onto your toes and pirouette together
    Fall completes a death march with festivities

    Understand that when night reaches its longest stay
    Then, only then will light start to slowly grow
    It is the holy hallowing of the year’s shortest day

    There are many reasons for celebration
    Mother Earth and Father Sky are consummating their marriage
    It is the orgasmic origin of winter’s burgeoning gestation

    Blood starts pumping through an embryo season
    Until, when fully formed the champion springs
    From the womb proclaiming renewal

    Maturing to become the hero that saddles the sun
    He rides the range of summer sky on the brilliant horse
    To provision us with the spoils of harvest

    And then in turn parades in pompous colors
    To surrender his passionate life at the gate of fate
    In exchange for a promissory note of rebirth

    Mother and father cuddle close for comfort
    Against the chills of evening and grief
    Within their intimacy the cycle again begins

    Gather and allow songs to levitate across empty spaces
    Stretch up onto your toes and pirouette together
    Revel in the hero’s holiday




    Submitted on 2006-12-22 00:24:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This is, to use an overused phrase, awesome! Inspiring and original. A fave!
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this one Chrystine, partly because in feels like animation happily showing visions in my imagination. Another friend of mine always remembered Great Mother and Great Father in her prayers as she prayed for us. They are begatting, no doubt, and all of us should be catching some love as it happens.

    But this combines the hero's journey as described my myth. And though it charges that one year with the mark of legend, it could represent lifetimes.

    Joseph Campbell (who was not any part of the canned soup industry) found all forms of rites as passage for human beings. And your ideas on the solstice make it all happen just right as I read along. I have to make it fave, it's great!

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      That was truly amazing; oh you just took me on the most wonderful journey,
    I am going to have to read all your work now, now that is aspiration oh I have some years to go, but WOW, your there.
    Love it!
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]


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