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    dots Submission Name: Reflectionsdots
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    Author: uconnfan1972
    ASL Info:    31/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 8/12/5
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 912



    Description:
       Not sure how I feel about this one...I think it has some promise but I cannot decide if it flows so well???

    I wrote this while thinking about the relationship I was in that was literally ending as I wrote the poem. I wasn't really happy in the relationship and was sarcastically looking forward to more one night stands and horrible dating experiences.


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    dotsReflectionsdots
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    Trapped in a house of mirrors,
    where all has been seen before.
    Wanting more, I press on
    and pray for this repetition to be gone.
    Some images clearer than others,
    while others offers false hope.
    I search for hope and find naught but a rope
    tehered 'round my throat,
    I choke and spit-
    down in this pit,
    this slough of despond.
    Farewell to another
    of whom I was so fond.
    Lurid lust seeping in
    as my weakness wins-
    sins abound as I search
    for she who'll fill this chasm.
    In the late hours
    we spasm in exctasy.
    I fill her with myself
    as she cries aloud.
    Covered by a shroud
    of temporary bliss-
    with an embrace and a kiss.
    She is dismissed,
    then on to the next.
    Lack of what's best
    and settle for what's left.




    Submitted on 2004-06-01 23:22:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah i've in istagnated relationships with females and find them appalling...when i find myself in that situation i go get some strange and forget the unfortunate past...
    write on my friend...
    | Posted on 2004-06-01 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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