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    dots Submission Name: Black and Blue Icedots
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    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1142
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsBlack and Blue Icedots
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    Could you give me away to the night?
    Let me be swallowed by black and blue ice.
    Just let me freeze or get lost in the dark,
    hiding away in the shadowy marks.
    And when you kiss me like that again,
    stabbing through words we write with this pen.
    Pretending the ink washed off with white rain.
    Drench them in bleach but it all means the same.
    Like my flesh rotting away in a murderous pose.
    Leaving my image still equally gross.
    The shower curtain draped tight on my face,
    to smother myself in that plasticy taste.
    Then choke on the pieces your throwing away,
    while icicles stab through the frozen decay.
    Melted plastic and water soak battered skin,
    pleading for beauty while covered in sin.
    Masked by your hand with mud black and red
    Still covered in dirt in an ash exposed bed.
    With these eyes aphetic and a body turned gray,
    a love once iced over now melts away.








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      Wow this is very morbid. I love it. It painted a lovely disturbing picture in my head. I really like this one. Keep it up...

    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this! It's really amazing and love how you wrote it. Very descriptive and definetly grabs a persons attention. Love it and you should definetly submit more!
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by rikuprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this what an good way to write I like the creativity and how you could grasph on to thoughts like that, keep up the good work ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      This really is brilliant. I love every word. It's a bit on the depressing side, but you wrote it so well. Wonderful job!

    Kaitlyn
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      oh freaking wow. ugh i love it. i don't know what else to say. it's so amazing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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