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    dots Submission Name: Corpse Clowndots
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    Author: uconnfan1972
    ASL Info:    31/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 8/12/5
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 995
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 864



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       Yes I know I sound like a totally co-dependent loser who can't stand being alone, but what about the poem? LOL


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    dotsCorpse Clowndots
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    Surrounded by darkness
    I cling to any light I might find,
    else my sight is hindered-
    leaving me blind.
    My heart numbed with empty despair,
    a sad and lonely soul indeed
    with love's burden to bear.
    Teardrops should fall like rain,
    but they don't.
    A shell of a man filled with
    nothing but echoes.
    Cavernous hollow living corpse clown
    like the walking dead
    pretending that it's all a game
    and sunny days-
    I feel ashamed.
    But I can't show my heart or inner being,
    for they generate confusion and repel desire.
    Like mire,
    my pain is-
    sucking, swallowing, suffocating.
    No strength left to pull myself out.
    I scream, I shout-
    but nobody hears me...
    or nears me...
    it scares me.




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