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    dots Submission Name: A classic kind of Love.dots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 595
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    Description:
       Adam I love you


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    dotsA classic kind of Love.dots
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    And you say you can see it all unfold,
    our lives played out on the silver screen,
    But baby our kind is a dying bread,
    and one more kiss won't end it,
    this finale will end with a boom.

    So I'll put on my make-up,
    and dance to the band stand music,
    rehearse these line
    and honey our love will be fine.

    We're a classic hit,
    Dollface it is us imprinted on the film,
    until the end of time,
    and we'll be more known
    than Bonnie and Clyde.

    So I'll play shy,
    and you'll wait in line,
    to ask for my hand,
    but Sweetie,
    we knew it from the begining,
    it will always be just you and me.




    Submitted on 2006-12-23 11:18:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was so cute and sweet.
    i liked it alot.
    it was like, the perfect recipe.
    had enough feeling and description and it made it perfect.

    So I'll put on my make-up,
    and dance to the band stand music,
    rehearse these line
    and honey our love will be fine.

    that was my all time favorite line.
    you did a really good job.
    i hope to read more soon.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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