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    dots Submission Name: One heartdots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 431



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    dotsOne heartdots
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    One heart
    Two bodies
    Can that work

    I don't know
    It used to
    But not anymore

    "A people divided
    cannot stand"
    It's the same with the hearts of people

    Given love
    Now forcfully returned
    So what is left for that imploding heart?

    Nothing now
    For that heart is dead
    Smashed into the ground




    Submitted on 2006-12-23 14:38:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i Agree with bleed tears it was a good poem but I am not to sure of the messgae here i find it a bit unclear maybe you could make it more clear for your readers what it is yoru feeling.
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      you're right.
    this is one of the most random things ever.
    it made no sense at all.
    but what i'm so confused about is, i've read a piece almost exactly the same.
    i don't know, i could just be freaking out.

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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