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    dots Submission Name: HayYouThereDancingRoundthePitdots

    Author: ConScribe
    ASL Info:    19/M/Tucson,AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.11 - 262/360/143
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 721
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2016

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    speakers from the soundsystem of supersonicsalvation
    shake the stage, opening with “OrangeJuiceJujuJunkyJive”
    as my lips get lost in lyricallovebuzzmagic
    hittinghardcoreharmonics through heaven’s MicHoneyHive,
    brutalheartbeatbreakdowns to the beautybass
    of my bloodbrotherband,
    bluesoulgreystreetghosttowns echoing out into emptyspace
    as darkness loses the lightlayeredland

    interlude and escape at the VahalaVampireVultureVenue,
    carcinogenicCamelcigarettes cloud the scene
    as a dumbassdynamicduo of DocMartindrugpunkdreamers
    brave a bad batch of !BOOM!BOOM!BLOTTER!
    Vicious Cid tickling the tongues and taste buds of two troubled teens
    who already appear to be missing the majority of their melted minds,
    halfhollowheadedantiheros with magicmushroommemories
    frequently reframing their thoughts, feelings, and fundamental functions,
    affected by the thick fumes of extratoxicacid found in Elmer’s edible glue,
    sharpening their libertyspikedspirits into swords to assault the status quo

    the house fades again, and the crowd comes in,
    scenesters summoned to the stage by a strangestrobelightsensation,
    shifting scenes of semislowmotionshowmanship set to softshredsymphonies,
    fadfollowers fighting over floorspace for that authenticupfrontfeeling,
    tears touching the truetuneteamsters, tough but tender,
    who screamsing along to the overusedobscenities
    of a sweetsweetsad lovesungsong, “SexSealedtoSexySadieSexAppeal”
    stuck in verse, crying and shouting the same lyric as loud as they can,
    not only hearing the music, but becoming it as well,
    empowering its notes as raw strength
    in order to control the equal parts of love and hate
    as they dance along the circle pit’s steepest and deepest edge

    Submitted on 2006-12-23 16:41:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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