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Dreams Turn Into Reality


Author: sravenlyn
ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Dreams Turn Into Reality



Dreams evolve from mental visions
To reality with life changing decesions
From dreams of bring with you
That suddenly somehow came true
To a love that makes me smile
That I can feel for a mile
Evolving from lifeless to full of life
Changing from girlfriend to wife
Forming into a rose rather than a flower
Allowing our love among all to tower
I'm glad we made these life changing decesions
Allowing our dreams to be more than a mental vision




Submitted on 2006-12-23 17:19:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really liked this.
every single thing it was saying was so sweet.
the last line made the entire poem exactly what it was suppose to be.
the rhyming made it feel short but i agree with the others about everything else.


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| Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is well-written and very in depth. One can understand what point you are trying to put across. The ryhming is wonderful, it does not seemed forced at all. I really liked it.
| Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful, very well writen and deep. I like this poem because the reader can really feel how you feel about this person. I liked it.
| Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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