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    dots Submission Name: My Slutty Merry-Go-Rounddots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsMy Slutty Merry-Go-Rounddots
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    Here we go again
    On my slutty merry-go-round
    Spinning and spinning
    Until I fall to the ground

    I let them use me
    To forget the pain of you
    All the pleasure they get
    And the pain I go through

    I fuck them
    To forget my fears
    None of them notice
    My silvery tears

    I am their toy
    To be picked up and played with
    A dream to everyone boy
    Just something for them

    So here go again
    On my slutty merry-go-round
    No one will notice
    As my tattered body falls to the ground




    Submitted on 2006-12-23 18:00:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hah,I get what your saying...Ive went out with girls whove done this after we broke up and Ive also done it but as a "lad" I wouldnt generally be called a slut/whore etc for doing so,Id probably get a pat on the back lol
    That way of thinking is unfairly sexist though and its slowly changing.Anyways I think both sexes do it cause theyre afraid to be alone,thats why I usually want to get a new girlfriend as soon as possible after a long relationship cos Im not used to being single.Its quite scary that you can sometimes need someone else to fill that hole.If this poem is about you Id say that theres no need to feel so bad about it,everyone sleeps around a lot,especially when theyre young.Anyways I liked the title of this poem,the merri-go-round thing is a good metaphore.Good work:-)
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like tis one. I understand it. I have had this feeling many of times. Along with other people at the same time. If it hurts you so much don't let them do it. Tell them to [censored] off and die bich~!! If they preceed run away. Don't let them degrade you. You are to beautiful to do that to your self. I love you!! And so do a lot of people!! So good write keep it up.

    I F.L.Y !!!


    kelsey ( nothing )
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what it feels like to let yourself be used. At one time you want it to feel wanted, and at the same time you know it doesn't help and its just degrading yourself...I can't explain the mix of feelings but I think this poem really puts them into words! Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by AnnaBullen707 | [ Reply to This ]


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