Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: My Slutty Merry-Go-Rounddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 360
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 621



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMy Slutty Merry-Go-Rounddots
    -------------------------------------------


    Here we go again
    On my slutty merry-go-round
    Spinning and spinning
    Until I fall to the ground

    I let them use me
    To forget the pain of you
    All the pleasure they get
    And the pain I go through

    I fuck them
    To forget my fears
    None of them notice
    My silvery tears

    I am their toy
    To be picked up and played with
    A dream to everyone boy
    Just something for them

    So here go again
    On my slutty merry-go-round
    No one will notice
    As my tattered body falls to the ground




    Submitted on 2006-12-23 18:00:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Hah,I get what your saying...Ive went out with girls whove done this after we broke up and Ive also done it but as a "lad" I wouldnt generally be called a slut/whore etc for doing so,Id probably get a pat on the back lol
    That way of thinking is unfairly sexist though and its slowly changing.Anyways I think both sexes do it cause theyre afraid to be alone,thats why I usually want to get a new girlfriend as soon as possible after a long relationship cos Im not used to being single.Its quite scary that you can sometimes need someone else to fill that hole.If this poem is about you Id say that theres no need to feel so bad about it,everyone sleeps around a lot,especially when theyre young.Anyways I liked the title of this poem,the merri-go-round thing is a good metaphore.Good work:-)
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like tis one. I understand it. I have had this feeling many of times. Along with other people at the same time. If it hurts you so much don't let them do it. Tell them to [censored] off and die bich~!! If they preceed run away. Don't let them degrade you. You are to beautiful to do that to your self. I love you!! And so do a lot of people!! So good write keep it up.

    I F.L.Y !!!


    kelsey ( nothing )
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what it feels like to let yourself be used. At one time you want it to feel wanted, and at the same time you know it doesn't help and its just degrading yourself...I can't explain the mix of feelings but I think this poem really puts them into words! Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by AnnaBullen707 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    129859

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Starseed written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry