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    dots Submission Name: Sheddots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote like a mad woman last night/ this morning. I'm too tired to know if it's good or not. I'm just glad to have gotten something onto paper.

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    I wish I could shed you
    like a snake molts its skin
    for the old me is inside,
    beneath this layer of wounds.

    Submitted on 2004-06-02 04:38:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wonderful wonderful....ive never read anything fromu i havent thought otherwise...smiles ange
    why must this pop up window make me keep writing...how many licks does it take to get to the center of a tootsie pop?
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      shed that skin, dumplin'! let out the real you! i like that you write such short stuff that's so to-the-point without much fanfare at all. this says it all--let me out from under your posession, which are the wounds i carry. great stuff, as usual. i know the feeling of not being able to write and just being so frustrated. i try to honor my muse when she decides to take a vacation, but it isn't always easy.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your concise pieces. I do believe you could extend this further than you have. It's good though.
    I enjoyed the read. Very nice
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      i had to put this on my fav list...i usually never have one in that catagory but actually this write has a different meaning to me...shedding me...to get rid of the horrific wounds in my heart and to forget...
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh, this is deep cuds...no pun intended...hehe
    actually it's quite accurate for someone to feel that way leaving a relationship and starting anew...
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]

    I wish I could shed you
    Like a snake molts its skin

    Wonderful simile, so easy to absorb.

    For the old me is inside

    Subtle implication that the old you is what you seek, that you were somehow spoiled for the knowing of this would be shed party.

    Beneath this layer of wounds

    So by way of reason HE is not just the spoiler but the remainder of the spoil, that which needs to be sloughed off. Interesting. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      It's really good. just start new again. better than drowning in self pity and despair. well done! I enjoyed it very much.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you got it out just right... everybody's got to learn how to rise from the ashes. snakes are usually percieved in a dark sense... let's just say that this poem is a man wearing white going south while a crowd of people wearing black are heading north. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      How about molting that person? Just kidding of course. Nice and very short write. I really want to write some things like this. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]

    Can I send this to someone?

    Perfect. Shed them... slide out of that past, out of those memories.... a brand new shiny you!

    It's good. insomnia is inspirative to you, it's just a pity that it leaves you so damn tired
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]

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