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    dots Submission Name: Illusion, deciet, and a bit of animdots
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    Author: camoflage
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 459/295/71
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       hm....yep. My parents were fighting. It's so awful when they fight. my dad does and says stupid stuff that leads to an argument. I hate knowing that my mom would have left him long ago if it wasn't for us.


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    dotsIllusion, deciet, and a bit of animdots
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    When the tears that surround you is all that is left,

    no more anger, only contempt

    I'll still be here,

    gazing on as everything you've built dissapears.

    Not unlike a canker, i stare still as our family is corroded through your animosity,

    as we overhear your shouts laced with atrocity.

    More than I fear the discontinuance of your cancerous relationship,

    i dread a continuance of life like this.

    If you looked at them you would see perfection,

    but thats the joy of illusion's provided protection

    you never see the venom beneath the image presented,

    its not visible, but just beneath the surface lies the abhorrence that in their hearts is cemented.

    A better deceptional illusion has never been concealed

    within such a convincing portrait of ecstasy yield




    Submitted on 2006-12-23 20:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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