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    dots Submission Name: Another Sad Disgracedots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 376
    Average Vote:    3.5000
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    dotsAnother Sad Disgracedots
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    Sitting alone in this cold place
    My soul splattered on the walls
    Just another sad disgrace

    The world has turned it's back
    Leaving me to rot
    All because of the beauty I lack

    I'm not everything they wanted
    Not ever good enough
    My imperfections unknowingly flaunted

    The sad music, my only company
    No one there to care
    Left alone in all my misery

    Iím sitting alone in this cold place
    My battered soul splattered on the walls
    Just another sad disgrace




    Submitted on 2006-12-24 16:13:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it I just kind of don't get it. But still a good write .
    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is good I like the way you put it keep up the good writes awasome lonely poem, ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      The words used in this were definitely really good in creating the mood of this poem, very dark and sad, and you can almost see and feel everything which is awesome. I almost didn't notice the rhyming at first, which is good because sometimes when things rhyme for me it's kind of distracting and takes away from the quality of the poem. Anyway, this was really good! Although I'm not entirely sure exactly what the sad music is, but that might just be cause I'm not thinking that clearly right now. I did like this a lot!
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by Missy B | [ Reply to This ]
      This sent chills down my spine as I read it. I finished it and read it again just to get a better feel of what was going on. I could picture a girl lying on the floor in her bedroom with a gun in her hand and blood dripping down the wall.
    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by Gbaby36 | [ Reply to This ]


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