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Author: Black-Death
Elite Ratio:    1.18 - 18 /90 /139
Words: 18
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Cold loves Heat
Heat kills Cold
Cold Hates water
water hates blood
Blood loves heat
Heat hates cold




Submitted on 2006-12-24 18:33:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nothing negative... this work is better than all the hundred word complete nonsense I've been reading here. thankyou for something abstract...
| Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't like stuff that's this repetitive because it can get a little boring sometimes. I do like how there were opposites linked together and the poem ended where it began. Oh, and most of the time you use the words love and hate, except for one time when you use the word kills which kinda throws off the thing. But anyway, other than that this was still pretty good!
| Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by Missy B | [ Reply to This ]


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