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    dots Submission Name: The Onedots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    ASL Info:    21/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 302/246/67
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 348
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 584



    Description:
       This poem I found the other day, it is a part of my past and wrote this poem about two years ago. I feel as if i was better then than i am today.


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    dotsThe Onedots
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    See this face with past I hide
    I have no voice I just have pride
    Silent confidence, not a day
    I go without the clouds of may
    I have a dream of longing days
    a pedal to the floor, in different ways

    one by one they all fall down
    my hopes and dreams of unheard sounds

    give me a missing love to crave
    one time I had; I always gave

    not the doubt of what is real
    the reality of what you feel

    unhappy times are withered gone
    keep in mind...I am the one.





    Submitted on 2006-12-24 21:53:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      would make a nifty lyric ... arcane, but the sound of the poem is really excellent, some neat rhymes that work very well and create a surreal and dream like atmosphere ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is fantastic, great write loved it
    | Posted on 2006-12-26 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      uhmm, it was ok.
    it was a good poem because it was simple but it didn't really have much to say.
    i looked at it like you just were trying so hard to rhyme that you forgot what you were writing about.
    the stanzas and format didn't really help either.
    i really did like the two last lines the most.
    I hope to read more soon.

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    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is short and sweet...A very cute poem...I like the rythem of it and the style! Keep it up...
    "unhappy times are withered gone
    keep in mind...I am the one."
    I really liked this line because it gave hope to the future and the out look of a one true love. I think that this poem is very good and I hope that you keep write poems like this...Well, Good job and...
    Toodles
    Katie

    | Posted on 2006-12-24 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]



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