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    dots Submission Name: Landscapedots

    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    My heart jumps in protest of my life.
    My blood runs thick this side of life.

    Calling out for love at the silence of life.
    Finding air and emptiness, this farce, my life.

    Willing to change, but nowhere to go in life.
    Waiting for the big change, finding its a lie.

    Based my life on my way.
    Too late to change, soon still I lay.

    How do I know what's best?
    How the hell do I know anything?

    Signs are indecipherable.
    No map as a guide.

    My karma is thick and obscures the future
    from my view,

    Yet I step anew.
    Will I ever find you?

    Submitted on 2006-12-24 23:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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