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    dots Submission Name: Talking to myselfdots
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    Author: Spirited
    ASL Info:    15/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 64/86/26
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1140
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1574



    Description:
       A friend gave me a title, and I wrote the poem. I quite like this, the third stanza is my favourite. C/c welcome...


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    dotsTalking to myselfdots
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    Talking to myself again

    I used to listen to my music
    Singing softly
    Softly...
    And when you came
    We'd talk
    Over the top
    Of it
    But now I'm starting to doubt
    If you listened to me
    Hello?
    I'm talking to myself again

    You know exactly how to
    Drive me up the wall
    By making me feel like
    I'm talking to myself again
    Did you ever listen?
    Did you ever take any notice?
    I'm starting to doubt
    And our song plays again
    I'm alone
    Talking to myself again

    Was it ever even our song?
    I don't think so anymore
    And that rose you gave me,
    It's wilted now
    The rain is falling outside
    It reminds me of you
    And those times
    Gone
    And now you're tormenting me once more
    I guess now I'm
    Talking to myself again

    I don't like being alone
    What can I do to make you hear?
    Listen to me please I beg
    I miss you even though
    you have your faults but that's okay
    I have them too
    We all do I guess
    And what I'm trying to say is
    I'm tired of this
    Will you return?
    No more talking to myself again
    That's the way it should be
    But if you return
    Please listen to me
    I'll listen to you

    But I guess you don't want to
    I'm talking to myself again




    Submitted on 2004-01-30 02:13:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      :p
    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by Undead37 | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree, this has a nice beat to it... i like how you encompassed the title well into your work, this is very good. you've left me speechless, and so i have comments to give.
    -dandan
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      It's good... it has that certain beat to it... yet another rap song...
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by MzJae | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done...this one radiates emotional unstability...good job
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]


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