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Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Sorrow is my pen name
Which takes this dark life away
Showing me the only way to feel
Taken aback by this pain that is all too real

Sorrow is my pen name
Because this pain bleeds from me
Like the fall of the rain
And the hope that evades me

Sorrow is my pen name
Because this pain is all I feel
Hear my words and feel the strain
On my heart that is all too real...

Submitted on 2006-12-25 22:56:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the poetic banter you produce in this mindful conversation.
| Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
  this is very good. i can definalty relate to what you have wrote here. it's like finding a writing that so describes you life as it is right now. i liked it good work. joanna
| Posted on 2006-12-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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