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    dots Submission Name: The Poetry Bookdots
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    Author: kurdy
    ASL Info:    15/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.36 - 13/15/5
    Words: 381
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 238
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2266



    Description:
       Haven't we all once fallen for something great then had something better choosen over us? Sometimes they are forgotten but when it comes to love, it's burned like a scar on our hearts, or its released on paper.


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    Your stuck in my head
    As Im climbing these stairs,
    To a poetry book
    Recording you there
    Your smile, your eyes, so just take a look,
    I've hid you inside
    My poetry book.

    These words are just echos,
    Been written before
    The happyness, sadness, showing up more
    Its because some things can never be spoken,
    Less by laughter in lyrics,
    Or words that are broken.

    Some stories have been written,
    But have not been read
    Its lungs are still breathing,
    But they must be dead
    Cause some memories have faded
    Not that Im complaining
    Ill cry one more tear
    For the friendship we're making.

    You write me a song.
    Im captured with laughter,
    Even once more,
    And the time after.
    I dream of your voice,
    But it fades like a vapor,
    If I dont jot it down
    Write it on paper.

    My sleep is a slumber
    You accompany me in
    My lips sing a song
    I can dance with you in
    But your love is still learning
    To be more concerning.
    You live in completeness
    But my heart is still yearning.

    I can fight like a warrior
    Take on ten thousand Men
    If I can't do it once
    I will try it again
    But whence I behold you
    I am lost for a while
    Caught in your arms
    And your boyish, sweet, smile.

    I wish to be Lovely
    when caught in your eyes
    And my heart longs to be
    what makes your blue skys
    Too bad there is another
    Who looks at you too
    Her face like a curse
    Thats following you

    She could be everything
    I am and more
    So choose for forever
    And think of me no more
    But as you forget
    I cover the heart on my sleeve with a glove
    I fell for your heart
    And you rejected my love

    So I write it once more,
    As I climb these stairs
    To a poetry book
    Recording you there.
    Your smile, your eyes, so just take a look
    I hid you inside
    my poetry book.




    Submitted on 2006-12-26 21:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Amazing, truly amazing. The classic love story gone bad, you can't have both. I loved it, a few lines took me a few reads to absorb per say. It is near perfection in my eyes, but it could use a few tweaks.

    I can relate to what you're conveying. Too many times to we fall in love and dive in head first, just to be rejected and forgotten.

    I really like your taking on ten thousand men. It shows strength, but you go on to show how he makes you, a strong one, weak. It really stood out for me, and grabbed my attention and thought.

    So again, a few tweaks for perfection. Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]



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