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    dots Submission Name: Tears of Blooddots
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    Author: the_truth
    ASL Info:    15/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 25/21/21
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 147
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 468



    Description:
       My tears are of blood


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    Tears of blood

    Tears of Blood
    fall from my eyes.
    They stain my soul,
    and cut like knives.

    Tears of blood
    I can’t unbleed,
    my heart will spill,
    and hatred seed.

    Tears of blood
    run down my face.
    The hated smell,
    and bitter taste.

    These tears of blood
    will fall once more.
    Let anger out
    And hatred pour.




    Submitted on 2006-12-26 21:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't really like the time stamps... I donno, I guess I feel it detracts from the meaningfulness of the poem.

    I love the poem its self; it's everything it needs to be and so direct. The minimalism of its construction gives it so much more punch. I tend to get carried away with description so I really admire that tightness of this piece.
    | Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by Morsketch | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really liked this.

    When I read the title, I didn't expect what I was about to read. It was very unique.

    Good write! I really mean that.
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this would be an awsome song


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    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      i think it's cute, although that's not probably what you wanted me to say. it's short, and to the point

    i like the way you keep referring back to tears of blood, creating imagery for the reader. i also think that it's very effective for the overall tone of the poem.

    it brings you back to a pseudo-universe: you cry with tears of blood, looking on with hatred that keeps increasing as time goes by. your vision is red and you look on with despair in your eyes and hatred in your soul

    i like it
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by sailorliones | [ Reply to This ]



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