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    dots Submission Name: Oh to the Emodots
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    Author: kurdy
    ASL Info:    15/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.36 - 13/15/5
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
    Total Views: 143
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1334



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       Why is ever emo kid worked up about people giving them labels? Labels are how we identify everything around us. If something has no label then it does not exsist. Labels are how humans buid relationships with other objects and humans.... and besides If you have no label then you are labeled the kid with no label.. yeah...every thing has a label... so every kid who argues about that can shut up now....

    Dont worry its just an Opinion. Think watcha want...


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    dotsOh to the Emodots
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    Dear emo friends of mine
    Did you leave your common sense behind?
    Did you decide to throw it out one day
    Cast it out?
    say it couldn't stay?
    Cause your ranting on so aimlessly
    About some things that apply to me
    Labels you say remain no good
    What are you some Robin Hood?

    Can you not see they are a need
    Labels, my dear,
    are the key
    Just like seeing in the dark
    Its how we tell our friends apart
    For even waters have their names
    Like the great Atlantic
    When our forefathers came
    Its name is for Fierce and stormy winds
    A warning for those who sailed it again.

    But oh, your too busy seeing in grey
    To see things in a different shade
    Maybe we give you a name
    So we can all be loved the same
    For the ones we love we call "friends"
    The others, known as "foe"
    But I guess your too distracted mirroring eachother
    Why should I expect you to know?

    Why be so ashamed of who you are?
    After all you will always be you
    Why not proclaim who you are?
    For anything that has no name
    Is nothing, nothing indeed
    For labels are our Identity source
    Labels are what we need.




    Submitted on 2006-12-27 01:26:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ummm, ok. labels are what people use when they are too lazy to get to really know people. you just seee someone judge them and think you have the right to label them? labels are meant to make people fit in? no theyre meant to leave people out, and make people insignificant. if you want to know what to call, dont say punk or emo or hardcore, say kathleen; because that's my [censored] name.
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by kathleenbrennan | [ Reply to This ]
      im not emo or anything but labels are what make us hate each other i mean seriously religon is segregated and we fight over it all the time countrys are divided and we have wars.

    plus emo kids hate preps and jocks metal heads hate everyone. me being one of those metal heads i hate you
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by social circus | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo! I really enjoyed this poem. The second stanza is great. This one seems the strongest to me. That first line in the last stanza is so long, it seems out of place. Maybe you could shave it down...there are a few words that you could do without, in my opinion.

    You had some spelling errors ("sence" should be "sense," "differant" should be "different," and I assume that "waring" was supposed to be "warning"). If you use a word processor, spell check is a great thing! :) But overall, I liked it a lot.
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by pick a locke | [ Reply to This ]
      i really disagree with you. labels are not needed. we don't need to break down people into groups such as dumb, emo, goth, freaks, geeks, and populars. can't we all just be freakin people!? i'm labeled as emo. emo means emotional. at least i have emotions. and even though it's human nature, doesnt' mean it's right. it's also human nature to get pissed off at other people and to want to kill them and sometimes people do. but does that make it right? no. if any labels are needed, there should only be one. people.
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      It is human nature to steriotype others.
    Even those who claim they don't, in reality they do.
    This was well written.
    I'm not too sure about the last two stanzas, but kudos for you for writing this.
    I suggest you shove this in people's faces to get the point across.
    haha!
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      Human nature, yes, but we all need labels. Names are labels, nouns are labels. Just matters if the label happens to be good or...otherwise. Good write, simple, and easy to comprehend.
    Keep writing!
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      yeahh we need labels. Its human nature yo.

    If it aint labeled it aint real Or there.

    yeahhh good write yo.

    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like the other people so far, I wholeheartedly agree with the message your work is trying to send. Being more than a little nit-picky, I was distracted by such things as 'your' when you meant 'you're' and some syntactical issues that could be fixed by some well placed commas. In the beginning of the last stanza it sounded awkward with all those 'are's. Still I really have no place to complain, for all I know you could have done all that on purpose. I'm guessing you had some people in mind when you wrote this?
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by widdershinswalk | [ Reply to This ]



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