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    dots Submission Name: Existentialismdots
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    Author: danativ
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 139/31/15
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Individualism walks its own path with no reins
    speaks of a truth in falling leaves that covert pain
    masking the sincere cold which equates the rain
    that falls like clouds from concrete covered skies
    without the time or capacity to well in my eyes

    the damned sanctuary is nothing but
    Searing words in a thickening blood
    the traffic lights you spoke of
    say GO, SLOW and prepare to STOP
    a common street lined with ‘buts’

    Not rightfully anyone’s for the giving
    so words and feelings stay undelivered
    this quality of arrogance sours the rain
    of thoughts once aligned on a single page
    that now fall from grace lathered in shame

    history will beg to question
    The arse of philosophy on which time rested
    Hindsight - sweetened candy coats
    Dressed obscurity with colored stick on notes
    filled spaces between the words that were wrote

    And so the door bell rings a sense of longing survives within
    The promise of hope in sight for tomorrow
    consummation and fear on time borrowed
    butterflies dance in a stomach churning
    A gulp in the throat and sweat on my brow that’s burning

    the final call, a bouncy ball
    hit across a net put up in the hall
    15 love, 30 love, deuce, advantage you
    one more point to win the game
    Then disconsolation leaves you without blame

    Existentialism
    Words by: Da Nativ




    Submitted on 2006-12-27 15:14:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      D.

    Not really sure about what you are wanting to express here. The second time I read it, I thought perhaps you spoke of racial predjudice, the third, perhaps about a relationship.
    I know that existentialism is specific to the writer's point-of-view and so perhaps this piece weaves in a number of influences that produce anger, sorrow, depression, hope, disdain?
    Still, this is so specific to your point-of-view that I find it a stretch to relate (though I usually can).

    :O)


    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by biska | [ Reply to This ]
      The essence of your write drips with hopelessness and futility, which, as I understand it, is what the topic basically embraces. So, by choice, the advocate occupies a tailor-made coffin well before the expiration date, to stew in the bitter herbs of abject godlessness.

    Well done, if not overdone.

    The Gadfly
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      although the theme isn't the same the flow of consciousness reminds me of "the lovesong of alfred j. prufrock" whih happensto be one of my favorite poems...perhaps i'll add yours to my favs.
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]



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