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    dots Submission Name: the rivers between medots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsthe rivers between medots

    rather the days unfold the smallest flowers beneath
    the stumbling silhouettes that abound the evening

    so often the crushing of the velvet morning
    is like a smoothe breath over a frozen puzzle
    i am here within
    only forever a passing of time
    a memory
    a broken dream where you began

    my voice is the rust upon the trees
    singing a cancer for the in betweens
    a collection of scattered teeth we crush with leaves
    and leave for the flowers, the sky and the seas

    i am the opening of bright flowers in your mouth
    turned to moths

    i am the deep forest of your summer
    i twist the tongues of all the birds
    until they sing your name
    like a flame in the river
    that only dims in the cool evenings of the city

    Submitted on 2006-12-27 15:40:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was just going through your work, and at first it didn't really hit me..and I wasn't understanding some of the stuff..but man a month can make a change to everything. you truly have a gift..you should publish..I feel so much better now that I view everything different, more clear. you are something else..

    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      "so often the crushing of the velvet morning
    is like a smoothe breath over a frozen puzzle"

    I love this line - it gave me goosebumps!

    Beautiful imagery. Your metaphors are really fresh and unique - not a cliché to be found. I feel like there's a hidden meaning that I'm just not catching. But I guess you don't have to fully understand something to appreciate its beauty, huh? Anyway, very well done!
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by pick a locke | [ Reply to This ]

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