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    dots Submission Name: the moonlit cavesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Gothic
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    Description:
       inner workings of my youth


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    dotsthe moonlit cavesdots
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    small leaves be the death of me
    my mind transcends the useless river

    only oracles and miracles adorn my early years
    i am the maddening of many retreating lakes

    even truth invested gains a loss no other face resembles
    i am but the recipient of many vast equilibriums
    so many voices reap the afternoon rewards
    and still we're only a graveyard away from yesterday

    loose gravel makes a mockery of mystics
    hammering away at the cherokee moon
    drifting on the wind like vahalla's candle
    all of this and even more unseen
    is the stillness of the empty marshes breathing

    i ask you this
    where do all the seconds go?
    do they vanish, or do we store them in our thoughts forever?
    like an apple or a flower turned inward like a child




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      mmmm.... a desert of imagery

    ~shadow
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