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    dots Submission Name: emotions in motiondots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 538
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    dotsemotions in motiondots
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    not to deny the scattering winter leaves
    or the the islands all trapped in silent midnight
    they are the brushings of long lost hands
    and the very most impossible dreams come true

    amongst this serenity a spinning moonlight
    perhaps more than ever a gentle movement of lips

    and i, so always a lover within this
    a timeless blessing undisguised
    i am the soft souls within your pushing
    the meloncholly movement in your speech

    when i'm all dreaming i crush the many skys inside you
    every colour another way to guide you home

    i am so many trembling clouds
    the wind to touch your morning skin
    i will always be the most familiar motion of water
    the safe place you save forever

    when the stars are all ripped up at your feet
    it is i that gather them together,
    place them back into the naked sky
    and forever fasten them to heaven for your eyes alone




    Submitted on 2006-12-27 16:21:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree. this is beautiful.
    you obviously have a lot of talent. the last four lines took my breath away.
    awesome. just awesome.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting you seem to be a very well put together writer. I really like how you used such good detail here.
    Very nice,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This write puzzled me. Its almost like this is part of a book. You are a fantastic writer. I epecially liked,
    "when the stars are all ripped up at your feet
    it is i that gather them together". Where did you come up with that? Very interesting.
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]


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