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    dots Submission Name: Walk away?dots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 605
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 895



    Description:
       This is about the guy I'm falling in love with...give any and all comments please.. I need lots


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    dotsWalk away?dots
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    If I told you I loved you
    Would you say you love me too?
    If I told you I need you
    Would you need me too?
    If I took you in my arms
    Would you hold me tight
    If my world came crashing down
    Would you try to make it right?
    If tears fell from my eyes
    Would you make them dry?
    If I were to walk away
    Baby would you cry?

    If you told me you loved me
    I would say I love you too
    If you told me you need me
    I would tell you I need you too
    If you took me in your arms
    I would hold you tight
    If your world came crashing down
    I would try to make it right
    If tears fell from your eyes
    I would make them dry
    If you were to walk away
    Baby I'd do nothing but cry

    If I told you I loved you
    Would you walk away?




    Submitted on 2006-12-28 02:24:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, I really did like this. I'm a sucker for the love poetry, especially the heart wrenching ones. The ending was the saddest bit I think, because it reminds the reader of just how scary getting the answer would be - the possibility of your love walking away. And apperantly this was written for yourself from your own personal experience, so firstly I just want to say well done showing us your heart, and I wish you love from him (if he infact deserves you.)...
    But now that I've said that, I just have one question for you: Were you inspired by a forward via email? Because it reminded me very much of a forward I got a while back with the couple, and the girlfriend is asking her boyfriend questions. " Do you think I'm pretty?"...He says "No''.... "If I left, would you cry?".. He says "No".... Then at the end he makes up for all his wrong answers by making them right by saying "I don't think you're pretty, I think you're beautiful.", and "If you left, I wouldn't cry. I'd die."... Well, I don't remember it all that well, it's much much better than that blatant summary, but I can't be bothered to look for it.
    Anyway, it reminded me of that, which can't be too bad of a thing being that the poem it reminds me of is one that's being seen all around the world and enjoyed by (probably) just as many people who see it.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is actually a very excellent lyric ... and would, then, make a fine song ... very neatly and deftly done poem-song ... I enjoyed it a great deal! bravo ... bravo ... bravo! ... Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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