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    dots Submission Name: Politics of Itdots
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    Author: Pprophet
    ASL Info:    19/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 91/12/9
    Words: 350
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Political
    Total Views: 831
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2363



    Description:
       A song I started to write in mid '05, never finished(yet again) I posted it up a few times on the net.. people were really feeling it then.. and I seen some real political stuff here, and thought I'd try my luck. I also messed with the spacing a bit, because this is the second thing I ever wrote.. and my lines are a weeee bit stretched and wanted to make sure it didn't all run together.


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    dotsPolitics of Itdots
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    [hook]
    i'm tellin you the facts you need to apreciate
    it's ironic how we go from peace-to-hate
    its just the polotics of it(they dont make sense)
    Its true, pussy does run the world, bush is on a power trip i love-it
    [hook]

    feelin like im just vagrant-tool
    born to be bad breakin all your favorite-rules

    dont get it twisted though talk shit and you'll die like the peterman-fetus

    the youth today all we see is death-glorified not a image we need-seen by americas premature-leaders

    terrorist groups to coward for a war so they act like sealy; just feature-sleepers

    we hate bush, but we relected him to his power-fix

    voting in numbers its a powerful-fist
    election day rolls around we say we dont give a shit about politics

    my voice a sound you'll never forget,you know im ready to blow like when apollo-ticked
    i know what im sayin puts pain in your heart, like a red beam firin hollow-tips

    the patriot act a pillow over our first amendment, coroner reports asphyxiation
    americans fightin the wars bushes are waging, soldiers just pawns to their deadly fixation
    patriots just hypocrites we talk about whats wrong, but no one willing to step up and fix-our-nation
    i'm the 'reeves' to this movement- and i dont mean superman I was the matrix


    someone explain how blood-shed leads-to-peace
    brainwashed to whats right- were all american idles as we watch them bleed-our-beliefs

    whats real feed to us through CNN
    a handful of soldiers die everyday, and the news just keeps telling we'll see-an-end

    how we can we live under a goverment who, expels god-from-schools with their sep. of church an state
    we help out the world, and yet they still got the nerve-to-hate

    young kids in the hood- 'soldiers to the ghetto holy-war' walkin around 'killin each other over jewels and crosses'
    our heros, and goverment glorify death- that shit just fuels-the-loses

    with their fight for freedom,
    you'll fight for your freedom..
    you refuse, your given your rights.. and they read'em





    Submitted on 2006-12-28 09:48:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can see where you're coming from. There is so much anger in this piece. You brought out the truth of the war and the strong hold our government has on our rights. I can't really picture it as a song, but it makes a beautiful free write poem.

    Politics are big contradictions.

    Nice Job.
    Jan : )
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]


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