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    dots Submission Name: Preparing Goodbyesdots
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    Author: Charlie Poppins
    ASL Info:    22, female, England
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 71/85/65
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsPreparing Goodbyesdots
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    Think I'm blind to it?
    think it didn't show?
    Think i don't know any better,
    or that i just let it go?
    Baby i know,
    Know you've walked away,
    but you don't have to say,
    those words you flung together,
    to unmake our forever,
    I can see it in your eyes,
    you're preparing your goodbyes.

    Was it ever true?
    was here ever home?
    Is it easy to just walk away,
    knowing i'm left alone?
    Baby just go,
    fly away to her,
    don't worry i'll take care,
    of all the mess you've left here,
    the memories you forget dear,
    you don't fool me with your lies,
    you're preparing your goodbyes.

    May you find your place,
    be happy all your days,
    Don't expect me to forget you,
    It's enough hurt to regret you,
    Baby just know,
    know i'll carry on,
    And i knew all along,
    You should've seen it in my eyes,
    I've been preparing your goodbyes.

    Just say goodbye.




    Submitted on 2006-12-28 10:40:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was an awsome use of emotion. You showed through this the feelings people get before someone leaves when they realise that it's is the end. This showed this very elegently along with showing a clear image to the reader of an exsperience that they themselves had gone through during there live, or at least it did for me. Great work on this!
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this poem. Your dialogue flowed very smoothly and the words were more expressive and complex. It embodies someone who is more injured and so much bitter, which is hard to pull off. Nice write
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]


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