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    dots Submission Name: the glass withindots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsthe glass withindots
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    "only the warming air i inhale" remarks the sun
    "i am the spinning colours of your eyes released"

    i open to you a love like rivers move
    so forever becoming the only fire a sky can breathe
    i am the eternal beating of your heart within me
    your melting touch my every night

    inside you sleeps the prayer my thoughts of you created
    like the blacksand beaches of the rainbow dawn
    and still forever my wings ignite the ocean with a whisper
    a sound you hold for always in your palm

    voice on voice a universe unwinding at your feet




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      i melt, i truely melt. some lucky girl must be melting too

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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