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    dots Submission Name: the forest circusdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsthe forest circusdots
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    every evening
    as i breathe your company
    i travel backwards and ahead
    upon a carousel
    beneath the water and the air
    a flower in the fog

    i am the honest bleeding of the night
    i am the only grave you once slept in
    to hide from the other skulls
    nevermind my twisted trunk
    cause i'm the only tree you ever climbed to build a house......

    some of the tiniest maps contain every minute
    of our lives
    and i am the orchid that rips apart the sky
    like feathers
    to bleed the river sanctuary where the pebbles sing our names

    still, inside my secret mind i am the moonchild
    i am the snake that swallowed heaven with a kiss
    and i am every shining moment of a star tied to the back of your heart
    like the light pours out of lion mouths
    and the hissing summer lawns relax every peice of skin you own

    in any other day i am the sadness of the winter
    and i can bend inward toward the inner heart
    like an apple turns its face to brown
    a crowd that knows no other joy
    than the amusement of running into itself

    i will grave these rainbows forever to your island
    and though the rivers may fold into paper dragons i'm told
    the only dream we'll ever share is always........




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