I'm going to keep this short, cos I'm a little tired and there's a rather large spider crawling up my socks. Once again I behold the beauty of the words you weave into your prose. This work (as most of yours I've read) is charged full of imagery. Not only that, it's also really thought provoking, which as we know is rare :P You challenge quite a bit of conventional thinking, and especially are able to conjure up fascinating pictures such as those in "settled so like a dove or an urn/ against the breast of an army", "giant particles a storm/ a lavish dream that showed me nothing/ angels a flow of hurricane and an eye"
My favourite stanza (I liked too many lines) would be this one
"all around like seashells they gathered only stones turned a many like my feet became the ocean and my burning hair the star"
I love all images to do with the ocean, or the sky, and you've done it justice enough here.
As always, your endings are terrific. This one serves no different, and you do have a pretty good man/beast under theme going. Try science fiction poetry one day :D Cheers Azuire
it's amazing. I must truly say that you have moved me with this poem. the form and the originality of your writing is a breath of extremely fresh air. this poem demonstrates your genuine potential to be a great writer. thank you so much for sharing! ali