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    dots Submission Name: patterns playeddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    i am the lone stone of the dropping lake
    the one that weighs the body that descends
    i am a thousand moments of hushed silence repeating

    within the seconds of our lives
    are maps that show where we've been
    where we're going
    where we are
    they present the easiest method of escape
    if only we could stop moving
    the big picture hides within the most minute

    i've seen you so many times inside these
    like a heron, like a floating dove
    like a hurricane i wrap around
    my fingers always fall short of touching
    the most vivid and valid of my dreams

    the only way i recognize my own face
    is through a constant repetition
    but still the mirror dulls the real sense of self
    it is only a reflection and i am actual
    or so it seems at times like this

    i always thought of you as the sun
    and myself as that split in the moon
    right where the dark nearly meets the light

    there are few things i know completely
    like the day i'll die
    and the smell of spring like a maze of honey
    i will hold these things close to my heart
    the reoccuring images of the inmost light

    i am becoming nothing always




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