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    dots Submission Name: many dreams of childhooddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsmany dreams of childhooddots
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    and a pale glamorous flow
    beholds the endless sunshine
    only at once does my heart unfold
    a chamber deep behind my eyes
    bright glowing star-shafts
    sparkle opal-like the way that shifting eyes
    amongst the river do

    and all around them grow
    the flowers of fire that time spills
    from its mouth a lions cove
    of translucent ravens

    like fireflies they dance
    upon the water
    flowing like tides
    and so began the creeping shades of deadly night
    across our slowly fading moments

    inside the gentle pebbles of the shore
    small gods rock back and forth and tremble
    these are the tiny inclusions of my mind
    becoming the many dreams of my childhood

    they mingled and became the shouting voices
    i hear now
    soothing though they make me shake
    and every tremor that i feel
    is simply me becoming everything




    Submitted on 2006-12-28 16:59:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was up there in the greatest things in the galaxy, which includes Harry Potter.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by robindavidhall | [ Reply to This ]
      wow nice i can see the talent

    my favorite parts:

    and a pale glamorous flow
    beholds the endless sunshine
    only at once does my heart unfold
    a chamber deep behind my eyes
    bright glowing star-shafts
    sparkle opal-like the way that shifting eyes
    amongst the river do

    also..!

    inside the gentle pebbles of the shore
    small gods rock back and forth and tremble
    these are the tiny inclusions of my mind
    becoming the many dreams of my childhood

    beautiful..finally someone else with orginality and flair
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Sweet stuff you have here. Almost the same style as me; definatly points out things I have floating around in my mind. What we were makes up who we are, yes...and time steals it away with every moment. Sad...

    Still people hide their past, and refuse to accept time. Hate it, yes...but you must accept it, before you can truly live, I think.

    Anyways, nice stuff, hope to see you around or talk some time.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]


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