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Last Thoughts....

Author: Jose Ragnos
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My dog BB has been put down on this day, and this is something that I guess works with all dogs who lived to be an old age.

Last Thoughts....

I have lived a long life more then most dogs,
Although this day is my last day to live.
My true age can't be found in any logs,
So to my friend I hope you will forgive.

My first masters have gone before my time,
Today is now my time to be with them.
My owners now have to become a mime,
My hearing now is like an opaque gem.

Now I lie here inside the gas chamber,
All of my pains now start to fade away.
I hope they will remember December,
And I hope my love will not go astray.

I will miss you all very much indeed,
I thank you for letting my soul be freed.

Submitted on 2006-12-28 22:09:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I know what i's like to lose a dog. I lost my best friend and eternal companion in 2004 after 14 and a half years, Kane a rottweiler/lab cross.
This is a good piece and speaks of the connectivity you had with BB.

| Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
  i recognize this as a sonnet, and it is beautifully sorrowful. You have captured someone ready for death to come and sees it as sort of a blessing, i think. This view of death is not commonly shared with many people, but this is comforting for those who fear death, as I do.

| Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]

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